MY
EXPECTATION
Everyone that lives in the world wants the best. Each
someone who tells excellent is today better than yesterday. All people have
expectation and this expectation is very affect at live in the future. At
writing 2, I have expectations to repair my life in the future: first, I hope
in writing 2 able to make proposal, journal, and pepper and also able to
develop my idea become an that
appropriate with grammar like introductory, thesis statement, and conclusion.
Secondly, I hope able to make composition like novel and my
composition can read by people and also easier to understand each other. Third,
I hope can discriminate of the text recount text, descriptive, and narrative
and I know kind of types using. Fourth, I am a teacher candidate, I hope able
to explain the lesson of writing to my students. As a result I will produce the
students who have skill in writing and able to develop ideas.
In conclusion, I hope all my expectation will reach an easy
to get it in order that I will become a writer success and also become good
teacher. All this are decide my life in the future.
where there is a will there is a way, keep spirit to get your dreams
BalasHapusI'd like to give you some suggestions:
BalasHapus(1. Develop your ideas more) Actually, you have good idea. However, it's better for you to develop more your four expectations into four different paragraphs. For example, your first expectation is written in paragraph 2 after you write thesis statement in the first paragraph. Tell to your readers, why you have to master the skill of writing proposal, journal, and paper. You can also tell your readers, what are you going to do in order to make your expectations come true.
(2.Check your grammar)
-Be consistent with your temporal connectives such as firstly, secondly, thirdly, etc or first, second, third, etc.
-In line ninth, you must use 'passive voice'. You should write 'my composition can be read'.
-You should also pay attention in using 'adjective clause' like in line sixth. As a result, your sentence has ambiguous meaning.
(3. Check your spelling) in line fifth, you mean 'paper' not 'pepper'.
(4. Check your writing mechanics such as capitalization and punctuation.)
After transition such as however, as a result, etc there must be comma.
You must write 'Writing 2' not 'writing 2'.
(5. Choose vocabulary that is suitable with its context)
For example, in line tenth you should write 'differentiate' not 'discriminate'.
That's all. Do your best n keep spirit ^ ^
wah, fighting soliha,
BalasHapusjust keep learning, work hard, pray a lot
:D
Solihah,,, I am proud of your effort. You are hard worker!! keep spirit!!
BalasHapusit's paper, solihah :)
BalasHapuswatch out the grammar yaaa! :D